27.06.17 - essay update

i have finished my first draft of my essay (not including the evaluation or synopsis). however before i hand it in be edited i have developed a process i need to complete:

- edit each paragraph one by one so it follows a structure that is easy to understand 

- cut down the paragraphs sos they are smaller and address one point or max two points

- apply historiographical issues to my essay to address the main four questions 

- look at past projects to see what else should be included

- check footnotes and references

- after this i will hand it into mr wright so get feedback (this will be on Thursday ) 

- then i will apply the feedback to my essay edit it again 

my synopsis an devaluation will be completed early holidays to be checked on Tuesday next week

however i am unsure about my third source to evaluate. i have already got bury my heart though that will be short as its evaluation is mainly my essay anyway. then i have Peter Farb's 'indian corn' review which covered a lot of historiographical issues relating to conducting native mercian history. all my other sources are very short reviews or websites that provided me with background information or is too little to evaluation fully in this section. there is the encyclopaedia though i am no sure if it is appropriate to evaluate. 

my essay is coming along though there are many areas i need to edit. 

13.06.17 - update and draft paragraph one

13.06.17

i have been writing my essay and completed a few paragraphs.

my body paragraph one focuses on browns aims
this is my first draft and will be editing once i completed the full essay which will probably be by the end of this week.

Brown explicitly states in his original publican of bury my heart at wounded knee the intentions for writing this red history. He expresses his concern regarding the lack of historical alternatives in the colonisation of the west and stresses the value of a native american perspective to influence current ideology and prejudice in america. Brown explains the reasoning for the previous bias in history, “the indian was the dark menace of the myths and even if he had known how to write in english, where would he have found a printer or a publisher?” and from this insight he attempts to fill this gap in history and to balance the one sided perspective of the american west. The necessity of revising history is a concept based upon discrimination and dogma, Robert Hughes pertinently advises a constant reconsideration of events, specifically regarding european conquest of north america, “After the myth sank from the histories deep into popular culture, it became a potent justification for the plunder, murder and enslavement of peoples”. The implication of a set history integrated into the culture of a nation forms current attitudes and prejudices, brown sums up this issue by stating that “history has a way of intruding upon the present”. However, he addresses the myths of america's past in a uniquely though focusing on the native indian culture throughout in the 1830s-50s, hence educating his audience to what he calls the ‘hopelessness and the squalor of the modern indian man” and demonstrating the cause and effect relationship.


(i only included my first paragraph as i am not completing the essay in chronological order as i find it easier this way. i have also finished the three paragraphs for other factors for continuity and change however they come later in the essay)

Questions i need to ask:
- should i follow peel structure?
- should i stick to one title when referring to native americans or can i switch between indian americans and native indians?